Short Story

A while ago I did a character study for my character study Ludmilla from my short story/script. I had mixed feelings about the short story, so I thought it would be a good idea to talk about it.

About:

So the story is a Historical fiction about a young girl (Ludmilla) living in Croatia in the 1800s. Ludmilla's life changes when she and her sister Ana are forced to move in with their uncle and aunt after their father loses a lot of money. 

They are pushed to learn lady skills to get married before the age of nineteen. Of course, Ludmilla isn't happy with this because she had always dreamed of living her life the way she wanted, just like her seven older sisters did. Ludmilla doesn't make this easier as she ends up meeting a young stable boy and falls in love with him. 

Her uncle and father end up finding out and after many failed engagements her uncle plans for her to marry her cousin if she doesn't find someone else quickly. That is until something serious happens which leads to Ludmilla and Johnny escaping the palace, and moving to Slovenia.

My Thoughts:   

Going back to my thoughts on what I had in mind the story came completely different. I had planned to do this big storyline with loads of different side stories e.g. Polly's pregnancy and death, more on what happened to Ludmilla's mother, a little back story and history on Ludmilla and Johnny, and the struggles Ludmilla and Johnny had to go through during their sweet escape.

However, I did come to the realization that all that wouldn't be suitable for a short story, and how it had to be at least under 2,000 words so it wasn't possible to add all that in. I had to cut a lot of it out and change the story around a bit to make it all make sense, making the final draft different from what I had in mind. 

I think the start of the story was great. I had a lot of great ideas from the opening to the flashback. it's what I always had in mind and I was able to successfully add it to the story. I really liked the way it starts off with her unhappily sitting in the carriage. It gives you the feeling that something is off right away without it being said. 

However, after the flashback is when I really didn't like the way the story was going. I found it really difficult to go from one scene to the next and also moving the story along. I also didn't like the fact that Johnny was more of an extra character rather than one of the main characters. I wanted the audience to know him a bit more. Who is he? his history with Ludmilla and more. I felt like he could have been a great character (I should tell the story from Johnny's point of view). Because of those reasons, I felt as though the story wasn't all that great.

Conclusion

To sum up, everything although the story came out differently from what I originally had in mind, I actually liked it. The only things I would change if I were to rewrite the short story would be how the ending was written, I would include some of the things I wanted to add like Polly's death and how it affected Ludmilla (still keeping it short) but other then that the story wasn't too bad.

link to the story

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